When I submitted this to a writing workshop at UCD, to say that I and it
got panned would be to modestly understate the matter. I presume this to be
caused by (a) the highly inhospitable narrator, whom you tend to start
hating about the third paragraph, and (b) the uncomfortable storyline and
subject. When I submitted the same story, unedited, to an actors' workshop
in San Francisco, they spent all night with it and adored it pretty much to
bits. It's still unrevised -- plenty of things in here I have in mind to
change around, at least marginally.
This story also has the dubious honor of having a very high ranking on a
lot of search engines as a match for such queries as "little girl spread
legs," "little girl underpants" (my favorite, especially coming from a host
in k12.ut.us, otherwise known as the Utah public school system),
"disney panties," and so forth.